Author's Note for Rhetorical Case Study

This is the first draft that I you will be reading. I wrote it in two intervals, the latter being this morning until 4 o'clock, so please take into consideration that it may not make sense in some areas. I think this draft is okay, but needs a lot more work because I am still having a very hard time trying to have more sources relate back to my thesis. Mark everything that doesn't make sense, mark punctuation, and PLEASE MAKE COMMENTS ABOUT THE SOURCES RELATING TO THE THESIS, AND WHAT I CAN DO TO MAKE IT STRONGER!